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deoxy99

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My Crazy Poem
« on: May 09, 2010, 12:31:09 PM »
In this almost rhyming poem, I will include the words orange and silver.

I grabbed an orange,
I turned it into a lozenge,
It was silver,
and I put it on a salver.
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Re: My Crazy Poem
« Reply #1 on: May 09, 2010, 12:31:36 PM »
Silver almost rhymes with Salver, and orange almost rhymes with lozenge.
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Re: My Crazy Poem
« Reply #2 on: May 09, 2010, 12:46:00 PM »
It's kinda boring... It doesn't make any sense. Instiad of a chain of events it is two sepreate events. That's why "The Poem" doesn't sound good. YET
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