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The Poem
« on: May 09, 2010, 12:05:02 AM »
What you do, is you rhyme with the previous line, and then you make another line not ryming... So for example


My first two lines are:

We look up to the sky
We see spirals...
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Re: The Poem
« Reply #1 on: May 09, 2010, 12:27:17 PM »
Spirals have been turned into virals
Because of my cell phone.
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Re: The Poem
« Reply #2 on: May 09, 2010, 12:44:08 PM »
I then hear your ring tone
It makes me fall off Earth

btw, deoxy, how does viral rhyme with spirals?

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #3 on: May 09, 2010, 12:46:08 PM »
I then hear your ring tone
It makes me fall off Earth

btw, deoxy, how does viral rhyme with spirals?
Nothing rhymes with spirals.

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Earth is worth,
Thousands of Cents

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #4 on: May 09, 2010, 12:47:25 PM »
Yeah, virals does.

Umm... Poems don't keep starting like

I like pie
Pie is good
Good is in my face
Faces keep going around
Around the Earth
Earth likes feet
Feet walk on it.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #5 on: May 09, 2010, 12:49:37 PM »
"Oh look, its by the other fence!"
Said the man who looked to shy

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #6 on: May 09, 2010, 12:50:30 PM »
YOU ARE TOO STRICT! I give up.
No, I just can't get any rhythm out of it.

I am never too strict. You just get annoyed at anything that isn't going your way.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #7 on: May 09, 2010, 12:50:38 PM »
I like pie,
and I will throw one in your face.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #8 on: May 09, 2010, 12:51:39 PM »
YOU ARE TOO STRICT! I give up.
No, I just can't get any rhythm out of it.

I am never too strict. You just get annoyed at anything that isn't going your way.
Sometimes my way is right.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #9 on: May 09, 2010, 12:52:26 PM »
How do you know if it is right? No one can know.

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Hey, you need to keep up the pace
Don't you dare ever slow down

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #10 on: May 09, 2010, 12:54:23 PM »
I WAS THINKING YOU WERE GOING TO PUT PACE AS THE LAST WORD! I WAS RIGHT!

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I weigh a pound,
and that's 500 pounds on Earth.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #11 on: May 09, 2010, 12:56:47 PM »
I WAS THINKING YOU WERE GOING TO PUT PACE AS THE LAST WORD! I WAS RIGHT!

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I weigh a pound,
and that's 500 pounds on Earth.

down, pound?

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #12 on: May 09, 2010, 12:58:27 PM »
OH MY GOD, STOP BEING SO FREAKING STRICT.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #13 on: May 09, 2010, 12:59:03 PM »
I hate this game.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #14 on: May 09, 2010, 01:05:09 PM »

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #15 on: May 09, 2010, 01:44:35 PM »

To the town I saw
A man with a gun

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #16 on: May 09, 2010, 01:47:37 PM »
Is this restart? What does it rhyme with... Ok this'll be a restart.

It was pointing at kids having fun
I ran to him

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #17 on: May 09, 2010, 01:48:46 PM »
His hat had a brim
I kicked his leg

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #18 on: May 09, 2010, 01:51:01 PM »
He said "stupid keg!"
The kids ran away

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #19 on: May 09, 2010, 01:51:51 PM »
He said "stupid keg!"
The kids ran away
He said "You'll pay!".
I slipped on a banana peel.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #20 on: May 09, 2010, 01:53:30 PM »
The ground, I could feel
He stomped on me

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #21 on: May 09, 2010, 01:53:57 PM »
He tried to shoot me
But failed in the end

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #22 on: May 09, 2010, 01:55:15 PM »
I live in a den
I could smell some soup.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #23 on: May 09, 2010, 01:57:51 PM »
end? den? whatever... I guess it's okay... not really but... w/e

My dog drives a coupe
He loved to shop

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #24 on: May 09, 2010, 01:58:16 PM »
POP,
Goes the weasel.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #25 on: May 09, 2010, 01:59:16 PM »
Those were hard times
But I overcomed them

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #26 on: May 09, 2010, 02:00:17 PM »
Times/Weasel. They don't rhyme.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #27 on: May 09, 2010, 02:00:40 PM »
Goes/Those

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #28 on: May 09, 2010, 02:01:34 PM »
That's not how poems work. The last words in each line have to rhyme.

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Re: The Poem
« Reply #29 on: May 09, 2010, 02:01:42 PM »
It's not that type of rhyme...