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« on: December 31, 2011, 11:25:46 PM » |
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This is a draft. It means: - Improper grammar and wording
- Lots of incomplete thoughts
- Horrible formatting.
- Ideas, that are subject to change.
<Draft> Ahh, goodness. Where am I? Said Fiah in a shocked voice. As he looked around, he saw a spaceship Who are you guys? Fiah said to the pile of people under the tree Uh, guys? You awake? Fiah said in a British accent. Urrr. Waaaaa! Said a girl from the pile as she got up slowly Hello! Said Fiah in a cheerful voice as he helped the girl up GAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Said the girl What the heck is wrong? Said Fiah in a very annoyed tone AAAAAAAAHH! I'm a girl! Said the girl, fainting just moments later Bloody hell! Said Fiah in a confused face I heard that! Said a young adult Er, hello! Said Fiah Hello! Said the young adult in a British tone Whats your name, and how old are you? said fiah in a casual tone My name is Matty, I'm 17, and you? said matty 17??!! You look like you are in your mid-twenties. I'm Fiah, and I don't remember how old I am. said fiah, in a bit of a shocked voice Well, you do look 11-13. said matty Fiah was about to respond when he heard a voice.Urrgh.. Where the flippin heck am I? said a body from the pile Uh, we are attempting to find that out; It looks like Earth or so. |
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #1 on: December 31, 2011, 11:26:51 PM » |
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Don't laugh. This is just a draft.
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Naru523
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« Reply #2 on: January 01, 2012, 12:29:34 AM » |
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But matvey is 17 years old
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #3 on: January 01, 2012, 09:21:12 AM » |
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But matvey is 17 years old
Pretty much a young adult--That's what he looks like in the story |
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matty406
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« Reply #4 on: January 01, 2012, 09:36:07 AM » |
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Ololol
Go on.
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #5 on: January 02, 2012, 04:14:12 PM » |
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I have no idea where this is heading-or even if it has potential.
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #6 on: January 02, 2012, 09:01:23 PM » |
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Oh, you don't know?! Said the boy
Erm, no? Said Fiah I. An annoyed tone
Wait, I see a spaceship! Said Matty
A spaceship? Where??!! Said Fiah, and he looked up and said "Oh".
Oh? Said Matty.
Er, Fiah! Said Matty
- Fiah stared in awe at the spaceship -
Fiah??!! Said Matty
Oh my... OH MY GOODNESS! Said Fiah
What? Said Matty.
The spaceship... Said Fiah in awe
What about it- wait, it's dropping troops, is that it? Said Matty
No. Said Fiah in a stern voice
- before Matty could chime in, Fiah spoke -
We ain't on earth. We are either on Aurivixa, or Revoluta. Said Fiah
How do you know? Said Matty
Look up there, tell me you see a spaceship with the numbers R7 engraved on the hull. Said Fiah
Yeah, what about it? Said Matty
Regiment 7. That means a war is going on, we must be in the middle of the war. Said Fiah
What war? Said Matty
Us and the SSSR vs Darvincia. Said fish
SSSR? Said Matty
Socialist State of Spheron Rimlu. Said Fiah
Oh. What country are we in now?
The Aeridani Space State Union. Pretty much like the old USA, except without all the flaws like fascist corporations controlling the government, Anti-Gays, the copyright law, and all the other idiodcy. Said Fiah
Er, so you're Fiah? Said the boy
Yeah. Do you draw maps a lot and use universe sandbox? Said Fiah
How did you know... Said the boy
Hi Naru. Said Fiah in a freindly voice
Er, hi? Said Naru
Want a few star systems? Said Fiah
Why? And how? Said Naru
What? Said Matty in a confused voice
You too. -Fish nods at Matty- and how? Well, if this is the ASSU, then I'm Fiah Storm. President of the ASSU. I will be until death- in which then my child, which won't be born for a while, -Fiah puts on a mischievous face- would inherit my position. Assuming I find a girl. If not, I think I'll select one of your children. Assuming you would be willing to adventure for a few millennia.
Is it good, bad, etc?
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deoxy99
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« Reply #7 on: January 02, 2012, 10:06:53 PM » |
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I'm not going to accept your nation being at war with mine in that story. I'm your ally, damn it!
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Darvince
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« Reply #8 on: January 02, 2012, 10:12:19 PM » |
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Ohdear, Fiah just borked his relations with deoxy.
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deoxy99
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« Reply #9 on: January 02, 2012, 10:14:49 PM » |
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@Fiah Change SSSR to Darvincia or Mudkipzania, those are the people you and I hate.
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Darvince
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« Reply #10 on: January 02, 2012, 10:16:22 PM » |
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@Fiah Change SSSR to Darvincia or Mudkipzania, those are the people you and I hate.
Since when did I hate Fiah? ...and Fiah isn't your servant. |
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deoxy99
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« Reply #11 on: January 02, 2012, 10:18:59 PM » |
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You = Fiah.
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Darvince
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« Reply #12 on: January 02, 2012, 10:19:34 PM » |
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Duh, I know that.
Fiah doesn't hate me.
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deoxy99
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« Reply #13 on: January 02, 2012, 10:23:36 PM » |
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Fiah, tell him the truth, Darvince just won't understand.
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Darvince
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« Reply #14 on: January 02, 2012, 10:27:17 PM » |
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Suddenly I'm atomic's father?
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deoxy99
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« Reply #15 on: January 02, 2012, 10:29:09 PM » |
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Where the hell did you get that from: Fiah, tell him the truth, Darvince just won't understand.
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Darvince
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« Reply #16 on: January 02, 2012, 10:30:27 PM » |
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Atomic's father somehow doesn't comprehend any opinions other than his own.
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #17 on: January 02, 2012, 10:31:19 PM » |
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I'm not going to accept your nation being at war with mine in that story. I'm your ally, damn it!
So I fixed! |
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #18 on: January 02, 2012, 10:31:51 PM » |
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deoxy99
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« Reply #19 on: January 02, 2012, 10:32:56 PM » |
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I didn't mean Darvince = Fiah, I meant the word "you" (in the sentence "Change SSSR to Darvincia or Mudkipzania, those are the people you and I hate.") equals Fiah.
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deoxy99
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« Reply #20 on: January 02, 2012, 10:39:55 PM » |
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Oh wait, you called my State the Socialist State of Ri mlu, it's Ri lmu. TREASON!  |
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FiahOwl
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« Reply #21 on: January 02, 2012, 10:44:31 PM » |
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Oh wait, you called my State the Socialist State of Ri mlu, it's Ri lmu. TREASON! I called it the Socialist State of SPHERON Rimlu. Sorry, it should be the Socialist State of Spheron Rilmu? |
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deoxy99
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« Reply #22 on: January 02, 2012, 10:45:23 PM » |
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Socialist State of Spheron Rilmu, exactly as you see it in this post.
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Bla
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« Reply #23 on: January 02, 2012, 11:01:24 PM » |
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SSSR - Socialist State of Spheron Rilmu
SSSR - Soyuz Sovietskikh Sozialistityeskikh Respublik.
Kolkolkol.
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deoxy99
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« Reply #24 on: January 02, 2012, 11:02:35 PM » |
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Wow, I never noticed that.
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matty406
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« Reply #25 on: January 03, 2012, 05:49:43 AM » |
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You'd probably be right in thinking I look older than I am, actually.
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